So true 🙂 Something for you newbies to think about 🙂
-Jan R
Are You Providing That Emotional Experience?
I can’t count how many times I’ve heard the phrase, ‘show don’t tell’. We all know you’re suppose to show and not tell. Why? You want the reader to experience the scene as if they are one of the characters walking through the story beside the hero/heroine.
If you’re like me, you know what you’re suppose to do, but you don’t really understand what to do to make it happen. How do I show and not tell? It’s a lot harder than it sounds. Once you start writing that novel, you’ll understand what I’m talking about.
There are 5 tools for showing:
- Dialogue
- Action
- Interior dialogue
- Interior emotion
- Description-Sensory
If you’re doing anything that’s not one of these 5 things, you’re not showing.
Why is it so important to show versus tell? Showing provides your reader with a powerful emotional experience. If you want to be a best selling author, that’s what you have to do.
It doesn’t matter how great you do everything else in that novel, if you’re missing that emotional experience, you lose. If everything you do is bad, but you have a great emotional experience, you may still win.
It all comes down to the take away. Every great novelist will tell you, you have to give your reader that powerful emotional experience, or they wont be coming back.
Something to think about 🙂
-Jan R
Queries – You May Be An Amateur – But Don’t Make It Obvious.
I have to admit I’m guilty of a few query don’ts. Okay, maybe a lot 🙂 I didn’t know any better. Like many of you, I just thought I did. You don’t know what you don’t know. I hope you are researching and doing your homework at every stage of the process. You don’t want to send out queries with the following blunders.
- Queries with typos in the first sentence.
- Queries that start with a nugget of wisdom: the submitter trying to be cute or philosophical. “Every step we take in life moves us in a direction.” Really!
- Queries that use very small type or brilliant colors in the background. Maybe if you add a fancy font it will jump off the page. Remember-the agent probably suffers from eyestrain. They live on the computer. Keep it simple-follow the rules.
- Queries with overcomplicated directions for replying. It’s great that you are confident you will receive a response, but the agent/publisher doesn’t want your travel plans. A simple street or email address will do.
- Queries longer than one page. Remember – concise, clear, straight to the point. If you waste words and wonder all over the place during the query, the agent/publisher will think you do the same in your novel.
- Queries with more than one agent in the “To” line. Each query has to be individualized to the agent you are querying.
- Queries that start, “I know you receive hundreds of queries a week.” or “I know how busy you are so I’ll get straight to the point.” By writing this, you have already taken up a full sentence of their valuable time. Don’t state the obvious.
- Queries that make grandiose claims. My writing is comparative to Nicholas Sparks, or I would expect my novel to sell 150 million copies since that’s how many women live in the United States.
- Queries that state, “I worked very hard on this novel.” So! That doesn’t necessarily make it good.
Something to think about.
-Jan R
What’s Your Biggest Obstacle?
I’ve stated in previous blogs, that there are a lot of reasons why your manuscript was passed over, and many have nothing to do with the manuscript itself, but I thought it would be nice to hear it from an agent.
You just submitted a query for an awesome piece of work. You’ve had several agents request full manuscripts and one even gave you a call, but just like that it was over. What happened?
You may have submitted an amazing piece of work, but the submission before yours hit the ball out of the park, and the one after yours did likewise. Those two works raised the bar and affected the impact you novel had on the agent.
Maybe you presented a very well written novel, but the market is saturated with the genre you are offering. Agents may have manuscripts for the particular genre you submitted on hold for the next few seasons.
You made it to the personal phone call. Where did you go wrong? Maybe you were missing the synopsis or logline for your next novel. Agents don’t want to just sell a book, they want to represent a career. Another guess would be that you were resistant to editorial thoughts presented by the agent.
The biggest obstacle one can have in getting a novel published is quitting. If you’re going to do a little bit right, have that little bit be the fact that you don’t quit. – Barbara Poelle, agent
Something to think about.
-Jan R
Third-Person
I write in third person. It just comes natural to me. I like the ability to get into each of my charater’s heads at some point. Not all at once, mind you. That’s called head-hopping. Something I have been guilty of in the past. I use Shifting Limited? I never heard that phrase before. I just called it Limited, since I was in one head at a time.
Third-Person is an excellent choice to build suspense and create tension. Remember, If the POV character doesn’t know what’s around the corner, you don’t either. If the POV character trusts a person, that you have determined to be dishonest, the tension will build.
What are the different types of third-person narrative? Here’s a refresher for those who have been around the block a few times, and an enlightenment for the newbies.
Omniscient – This narrative is all-knowing, allowing the author to enter the minds of anyone they want. It is the preferred narrative in classic literature. The works of Charles Dickens would be good examples.
Cinematic – The author describes events as impartially as possible. Consider yourself a fly on the wall. You see everything going on around you, but you can’t hear the character’s thoughts. Ernest Hemingway used this narrative.
Moments of high drama and physical violence, or the necessity to compress time are better served from this more distant perspective.
Limited – The narrative is limited to a single person’s perspective. If the character doesn’t know something, then the reader won’t either. This is the most prevalent approach to writing literature.
Third-Person Limited is much like First-Person with one crucial distinction. You aren’t trapped within the character’s perspective. You can look into the character’s head and know their thoughts and then back away when you would like to mute them.
Shifting Limited Or Multiple Limited – The point of view changes throughout the novel. To avoid head-hopping, the point of view character should be limited to one per chapter, scene, or some other easily definable chunk.
Something to think about.
-Jan R
Query Do’s And Dont’s
If you’re a serious writer, or serious about becoming a serious writer, you probably know what a query letter is. In case you don’t, it’s simply a letter you would send to an agent or publisher requesting representation of your novel.
And while it is just a letter, it’s a very important letter that has to catch the attention of the agent it is addressed to and convince him/her that you have something to offer. It is your foot in the door that will hopefully make all your dreams come true.
When you have finished your masterpiece and are ready to pitch your work to an agent, remember, there are query do’s and don’ts.
Do
- Check the agent’s or publisher’s website to verify contact information. You want to make sure your query get’s to the right place.
- Play by the rules. The agency or publisher will be specific about what they want included and how they want it presented.
- Track your submissions. You don’t want to send queries to the same agents every quarter. They notice.
- Proof your email on different email services. As a test, you could send it to a friend or significant other to ensure there are no formating issues. I like the way one agent put it. “Your beautiful document could look like a ransom note on the other end.” I never thought about that 🙂
Don’t
- Be coy.
- Teasers don’t belong in queries.
- Send anything to more than one person at the same agency. They talk and will find out. It makes a bad impression.
- Send queries out to companies at large. Be specific in who your query is addressed to.
- Follow up on an unsolicited query unless you think it didn’t arrive. If the agent didn’t respond, they aren’t interested.
- Use a mass mail service or mass mail your own query. Keep it personal and individualized to each agent you send it out to. They are not looking for a generic letter. We all hate form letters.
- Offer contrived empathy, such as “I know that you must be overwhelmed by submissions . . .”
- Describe more than one project at a time.
- Attach materials to your query unless specified by the agent your are querying.
Something to think about.
-Jan R
Stay Active – Revisited
When you write, you want to use the active voice. It’s clean, concise, and simple. The active voice is easy to read and understand.
Subject + Verb
- Susie sang.
- Michael ate.
- Jeffery kicked.
Subject + Verb + Direct Object
- Susie sang songs.
- Michael ate soup.
- Jeffery kicked cans.
These examples are basic, and can be embellished with adjectives, adverbs, modifiers, etc. to dress them up, but the Subject/Verb order should remain the same.
95% of your sentences should be written in the active voice. You want the doer/subject at the beginning of the sentence.
When you use the passive voice in writing, you have to introduce new parts of speech just to make the sentence mean the same as it would in active voice. The result is a wordy sentence that makes you wait to find out who the subject is.
Passive voice – Direct Object + Dead Verb + Participle form of Verb + optional Preposition + optional Subject.
The winner was written on the community board by Carol. (Passive)
Carol wrote the winner on the community board. (Active)
As you can see, passive voice is not simply a reversal of active voice. It has additions, and I haven’t discussed the fact that many passive sentences are incomplete.
The message was sent.
So the above sentence is grammatically correct, but it’s missing information. Who sent the message, and to whom was it sent?
Why would anybody use the passive voice? Well it comes in handy if you’re a businessman or politician. It allows you to avoid responsibility.
- Your position has been eliminated. vs. I eliminated your position.
- Your taxes will be raised. vs. I will raise your taxes.
When you’re writing a novel, you’re not trying to avoid responsibility. You’re trying to draw your reader into an exciting adventure that keeps your reader turning pages until the very end.
Keep your sentences active. Something to think about 🙂
-Jan R
Dead Verbs Don’t Move! (Revised).
When you’re writing a novel, you want to use concrete, everyday verbs. Examples of these are jump, smile, run, look, show, and eat. You can picture the actions in your head and there is no ambiguity.
He ran down the street and jumped over the fence.
Replace weak or dead verbs with concrete verbs as often as possible. I say as often as possible, because there will be rare occasions when the weak or dead verbs are necessary.
Weak verbs usually end in ‘ate’ or ‘ize’. You know the ones. Some examples are finalize, incorporate, anticipate, categorize. They leave a vague sense of action without spelling it out. As a reader you have to reach for it, and these verbs can really way down your sentence.
The bookkeeper utilized her expertise to manipulate the numbers.
Dead verbs don’t evoke movement or images. They stop the action. They allow us to generalize instead of provide the details necessary to picture what is going on. They tell us what’s happening when we want to see. Examples of dead verbs are was, is, were, are, could, had.
Cassandra was angry.
Versus
Cassandra picked up the flower vase and threw it into the wall. She stomped across the room, slamming the door as she left.
I think you get the picture. Something to think about. I hope this helped.
-Jan R
Different Types Of Rejection – You Mean There’s More Than One?
I know I’ve written a few blogs on rejection over the past year, but let’s be honest, if you are a writer, it’s a part of life. If you want to be a writer, you have to learn to accept them graciously and learn from your mistakes, or maybe your not mistakes.
That didn’t make sense, but what I’m trying to say is you may not have made a mistake. There are so many reasons a piece of work is rejected, and it may have nothing to do with the quality of your work.
I ran across an interesting article in Writer’s Digest this month that listed the 5 types of rejection letters that agents send out. I added a 6th rejection, even though it isn’t a written response, it is fairly common.
- The form letter – Thank you so much for your interest in our agency . . . . I’ve gotten quite a few of these.
- The sympathetic feedback dump – I’ve received this one on a few occasions, and was happy to receive a real and personal response. The agent offered invaluable advice, and while it was a rejection, she was thoughtful and kind. Instead of saying this is a bunch of crap not fit to publish, she politely said, it’s not ready for publishing.
- The insult – So thankful I’ve never received this one. It’s hard enough to accept rejection without having someone rub it in with discouraging words.
- The ramble – You read it over and over and still aren’t sure what the agent is trying to say. Did they accept it or reject it? I have to admit one of my letters was somewhat confusing. While the agent said it wasn’t quite ready, she was very nice and offered suggestions to make it ready. Was she waiting for me to make the corrections and send it back? Was she just helping me out with future queries?
- The sales pitch – Your rejection comes with an encouragement to purchase a subscription to the magazine you’re pitching to. So you’ll know what they are looking for.
- The none response – It deserves an honorable mention. I think this is one of the worst. You wait and look for weeks and months for some type of response before you accept the fact that they are not interested and aren’t even taking the time to inform you.
Remember, even rejections can offer valuable insight to carry you forward. Use them to your advantage.
Something to think about.
-Jan R
Offer Your Support – Be A Friend!
I’ve been in a crazy busy season over the past year. I’ve allowed distractions to get in the way of my blogging and writing. I know we all have times in our lives when we have pulled away from the things we want to do to put out fires and handle a crisis, but I let mine get out of hand and it really impacted my writing time as well as my relationships with fellow bloggers.
I went back to my posts and found a blog I had written several years ago for inspiration. If You Build It They Will Come. The gist of the blog was if you want to have friends, you have to be a friend. They want just come without an invite.
You can put your thoughts out there in a blog and you might get a hit from time to time, but developing relationships, supporting fellow bloggers, and just taking the time to say hey, can make all the difference in the world.
Something to think about.
-Jan R
Writing your first novel-Things you should know 