Show Don’t Tell

September 3, 2019 Writing your first novel-Some things you should knowShow don't tell, Writing tips2 Comments

I can’t count how many times I’ve heard the phrase-show don’t tell. Everybody knows you’re supposed to show and not tell. You want the reader to experience the scene as if they are one of the characters walking through the story besides the hero/heroine.

If you’re like me, you know what you’re supposed to do, but you don’t really understand what to do to make it happen. How do I show and not tell? It’s a lot harder than it seems. Once you start writing that novel, you’ll understand what I’m talking about.

There are 5 tools for showing:

Dialogue
Action
Interior dialogue
Interior emotion
Description-Sensory

If you’re doing anything that’s not one of these 5 things, you’re not showing.

Why is it so important to show versus tell? Showing provides your reader with a powerful emotional experience.

It doesn’t matter how great you do everything else in that novel if you’re missing that emotional experience, you lose. If everything you did is bad, but you have a great emotional experience, you may still win.

It all comes down to the takeaway. Every great novelist will tell you, you have to give your reader that powerful emotional experience or they won’t be coming back.

-Something to think about 🙂

-Jan R

Word Echos!

August 20, 2019 Writing your first novel-Some things you should knowWord Echos, Writing tipsLeave a comment

imagesB1G33MWE Word Echo? I’m sure you have an idea of what it is, even if you haven’t heard the term before. It’s the use of the same word in close proximity or in the same sentence.

It’s considered ugly and inelegant. Don’t do it! The good news is, it’s probably one of the easiest mistakes to correct.

Just delete one of the repeated words if you can do so without changing the meaning of the sentence. If that doesn’t work, you’ll simply have to replace the duplicate with a new one.

That can be a little tricky. You have permission to pull out the thesaurus, just don’t get carried away, and consider the word you’re using as a replacement.

Example:

Angrily– bitterly, impetuously, tempestuously, threateningly, fiercely, furiously, violently, infuriatingly, tigerishly (I didn’t make this one up)……

Many of the words listed are the same but different. They range from a slight variation in meaning to utterly ridiculous.

Footnote: It’s okay to repeat if you’re writing poems, songs, or emphasizing a point. After I finished this blog, I thought about Martin Luther King Jr’s I Have A Dream speech. His repeats were intentional and poetic.

Just something to think about.

-Jan R

It’s Just A Season!

August 14, 2019August 22, 2019 Writing your first novel-Some things you should knowLeave a comment

4-seasons We all go through seasons in our life that seem to dictate our comings and goings, leaving little room for pursuing our interests. I find myself in one of those seasons right now, as I struggle to find time to write while caring for an aging parent.

I am not writing this post as an excuse, but as an explanation as to why I am not as engaged as I have been in the past.

In an effort to post quality blogs that I feel will provide newbies with the information they need to know, I have been relying heavily on older blogs, that the majority of my followers have never read.

I have to admit, I was not good at this blogging thing in the beginning and had no idea how to reach out and ascertain followers. I thought if I built it they would come. I wrote the blog post to dispell the myth, once I realized that that was not how it worked.

At the end of my first year, I had a little over 50 followers. It was bad. The blogs I shared during that time period were great. I have to admit I found more grammatical errors than one would expect from a how-to blog, but the information was accurate and need-to-know.

To those who actually read the blogs grammatical errors and all, I apologize and thank you. For those newer to my site, you get the blog posts minus the grammatical errors 🙂

Thank you for stopping by.

-Jan R

Sentences – The Long And Short Of It -Revisited

August 13, 2019 Writing your first novel-Some things you should knowSentences, Writing tipsLeave a comment

AAEAAQAAAAAAAAiMAAAAJDg5M2Q4NGJiLTBhMTQtNDA5Ni1hNGVmLTM2YWRiZjczMDhjNQ Have you ever read a sentence and thought that is way too long? The author lost you two commas ago, and now you have to go back and read the whole thing again to try and figure out what’s going on.

Or maybe you read a short sentence, followed by another short sentence, and another, and you’re thinking whoa, slow down.

There’s not a set rule for short or long. The sentence length you choose depends a lot on what you are trying to accomplish. There are good reasons for those long, lost me a long time ago sentences, and short, what just happened sentences. It’s up to you to decide when to use them, given the context of your writing.

What do short sentences do?

Create tension-When an author starts using short sentences, it’s usually a sign that something is about to happen.—-The dog growled. His teeth flashed. Jake turned. It was too late.
Call the attention of a reader to a significant detail—She walked past Central Park in Manhattan with her head held high. Gorgeous woman. Long blond hair. Blue eyes. Impeccable taste.
Present sudden events-Out-of-the-blue actions that no one was expecting.—-We sat quietly enjoying our meal at the local fast-food restaurant. Boom! “What was that?” I turned to see people rushing toward the gas station up the street.
To summarize the ideas presented in the long paragraph or sentence.

What do long sentences do?

Develop tension-While the short sentence is imminent, culminating with the actual event being acted out, the long sentence adds to the suspense, hinting at a situation in the process of developing.
Give vivid description-depicting a setting, love scene, or someone’s appearance.—Autumn came without special invitation coloring the trees in orange, yellow and red, whispering the cold in our ears and hiding the warm sun rays from our eyes.
Investigates arguments, ideas, or facts thoroughly.

Although long sentences have the smell of the old-fashioned 19th-century romantic prose, the usage of the long sentence in modern creative writing has its place. When it comes to writing artistic literature, fairy tales, ghost stories, or mysteries, don’t underestimate the effects of short sentences.

Hope this didn’t confuse you too much. To sum it up, there’s a time and place for everything 🙂

-Jan R

You Don’t Know What You Don’t Know

August 8, 2019October 17, 2019 Writing your first novel-Some things you should knowLearn to write, Writing tipsLeave a comment

Enough already! At least that’s how I feel sometimes. I’ve been through my book more times than I can count. In my own defense, no one taught me how to write. I had a great story idea and decided to give it a whirl.

I thought it was ready, and then real life happened. My wonderful work was rejected by the five agents I sent it to. One of them must have seen something promising. She took it upon herself to provide me feedback about what I was doing wrong (there was a long list), and what I needed to do to improve my work.

I was totally humiliated. Grammatical and Structural errors are kindergarten stuff and completely unacceptable. Even I should have gotten those right. I could understand my issues with head-hopping and on-the-nose-writing. Those terms were totally foreign to me. I wasn’t a professional novelist. I thought all you had to do was put words on paper and create a wonderful story that everyone wanted to read. How was I to know there were rules?

And what was the deal with dragging dialogue? My people were talking. How was I suppose to know dialogue moved the story forward or had to have some significance? I couldn’t believe I sent an agent such inferior work!

When you’re a newbie, you don’t know how bad your work is because you lack the knowledge and skills necessary to produce publishable work. While there may be a few prodigies out there, chances are, you aren’t one of them. Sorry!

Like myself and many others, you’re going to have to pay your dues and learn the craft. Then you will be ready to write that New York Times bestseller.

One of my favorite sayings is, you don’t know what you don’t know. I’m not sure where I picked that up from, but it’s true. I wasn’t intentionally sending out bad work. I just didn’t know.

-Jan R

Write For The Masses – Revisited

August 8, 2019October 15, 2019 Writing your first novel-Some things you should knowAcademe, Write What You Like, Writing tipsLeave a comment

cha_647_020717110811 Why do so many perfectly nice people make such pompous asses of themselves when they sit down at a typewriter? – Dean R Koontz.

Even if you’re not a fan of Dean Koontz’s, I would recommend finding a copy of his book, How To Write Best Selling Fiction. You won’t find it in book stores. It’s out of print but still considered one of the best resources for new writers. Check used book stores, or go online ( That’s where I found mine). Now back to the pompous asses.

What Mr. Koontz was getting at, was new authors and not so new authors sit down and try to write A Tale Of Two Cities, The Scarlett Letter, or Moby Dick. The idea of sitting down and attempting to write ‘important and lasting literature’ is pretentious and self-defeating. Keep in mind, these books are seldom read these days.

If an author ignores the masses and refuses to write a novel with popular appeal, if he chooses to live solely or primarily by the grace of academe, then he will die by academe.

What’s the problem with Academe? The standards are considerably less stringent.

Academe views a plot as having little or no use. It is restrictive, impacting the writer’s imagination.
Academe does not worry about pace or filling a story with action.
Literary novels seldom have genuine heroes and heroines. The characters are almost always weak, flawed, and unlikeable.

Charles Dickens was considered a hack in his day. He was paid to thrill the masses by producing melodrama. His stories were entertaining and relatable. They have been kept alive for so long by the masses, that the academe finally had to admit that he was a great writer.

Remember, the masses read storytellers. They don’t read academically-oriented novelists. They want stories that speak to them.

When you write to please yourself, you are writing to please an individual. When you write to please an audience, you are writing to please a lot of individuals. When you write to please academe, you are writing to please an institution.

Something to think about.

-Jan R

Commas, Commas, And More Commas!

August 8, 2019 Writing your first novel-Some things you should knowCommas, Editing, Writing tips3 Comments

Lets-eat-grandpa Commas are an albatross around my neck. Maybe that’s a bit dramatic, but they are frequently my downfall in writing prose. Unfortunately, they are the most common punctuation mark within sentences, so you had better learn their proper use.

What’s the purpose of commas?

Separate main clauses linked by a coordinating conjunction. Example: The house was built, but it had no tenants. The meal was cooked, and the kitchen was cleaned.

2. Set off most introductory elements. Example: Unfortunately, the rest of the house was a mess. Of course, I would love to go.

3. Set off nonessential elements (phrases that could be removed from the sentence and not affect its meaning) Example: The injury, sustained from the fall, needed to be taken care of. The words set apart by the commas are informative but not necessary to convey the idea.

4. Separate item in a series/list. Example: She had eggs, grits, sausage, and bacon for breakfast.

5. Separate coordinate adjectives. Example: She was an independent, hardworking woman. The warm, cozy comforter was all I needed.

6. Separate quotations and signal phrases( she said, he wrote, said Elsie). Example: “Knowledge is power,” wrote Francis Bacon. Lisa said, “Do not walk on the grass.” There are some exceptions to this rule. Example: “That part of my life was over,” she wrote. “His words had sealed it shut.” “Claude!” Jamie called. James Baldwin insists that “one must never, in one’s life, accept…injustices as commonplace.” (It’s integrated into the sentence so a comma isn’t necessary.)

7. Separate parts of dates, addresses, place names, and long numbers. Example: July 4, 1776, is independence day. December 1941(doesn’t need a comma) Raleigh, North Carolina, is the location of NC State University. Do not use a comma between a state name and a zip code.

8. Use the comma to separate long numbers in groups of three. With numbers of 4 digits, the comma is optional. Example: 1,000,000 1000

Okay, now you know what I know. This exercise was as much for me as it was for you. Hopefully, I can retain the information and use it during my next revision 🙂

Hope it helped.

-Jan R

Are You An Overwriter?

August 6, 2019 Writing your first novel-Some things you should knowOverwriting, Writing tipsLeave a comment

eb54a872416ead7c0e1ca63e01d30416--writing-prompts-writing-tips Overwriting is a result of our own effort to figure out what’s happening in any given scene. Only after we have discovered that core truth can we know what truly belongs and what doesn’t, based on a clearer knowledge of what we’re trying to say and what the scene requires. – David Corbett

So why do we overwrite? Insecurity. Annie Dillard describes one type of insecurity as “the old one-two.” You write your thoughts, feel like you have to explain yourself and repeat what you just said using different words. Remember you want to say it once, say it well, and move on.

Another reason for overwriting is the anxiety of feeling you didn’t give your reader a clear, concise picture of what’s going on. The reader needs to know, right? Give your reader some credit. Maybe they already know what’s going on based on everything they’ve read so far, or maybe they don’t need to know everything. Leave a little mystery and give yourself fodder for upcoming chapters.

The good news is overwriting is the best problem to have. You just have to find that sweet spot where you give your readers just enough to allow their imagination to take control.

Don’t bog your reader down with needless words. Keep them engaged and moving forward with the thrill of finding out what lies just around the corner.

Something to think about.

-Jan R

Maybe It’s Not You!

August 1, 2019August 1, 2019 Writing your first novel-Some things you should knowElevator Speech, rejection, Writing tipsLeave a comment

You may have a great elevator speech/pitch for an editor, but that doesn’t mean it will be accepted. Don’t take it personal. There are many reasons your work is rejected,
and they have nothing to do with your writing or how it’s presented. Take heart and don’t give up.

Common reasons for rejection

The editor has too much on their plate. They are only human just like the rest of us. They may really like your work but just not have the time to pursue it. They could request that you wait until they have the time to give your work their full attention, but that wouldn’t be fair to you. In reality, they would be asking you to put everything on hold and inhibit you from pitching to another editor.
The piece isn’t a good fit for that particular editor. Know what they are looking for.
The Editor has insider info. In the past editors could post what they wanted, but these days, authors do surveys, interviews, and talk to focus groups. In order for a publication to be successful, the editor has to provide what their reader is looking for.
The concept lacks originality. You can do a simple google search to find out how original your great idea really is.
The editor may be afraid to gamble on your skills, especially if you’re new. Have that great pitch, but also have that article or piece of work complete so the editor knows you’re serious and can complete what you have started.

This list was provided by an editor at Writer’s Digest. Her focus was on magazine/publication articles, however, these reasons for rejection also apply to novels.

I would take a good look at that elevator speech to make sure I’m presenting my work in the best light. If the speech/pitch is sound, maybe it’s not your work. Consider moving on to the next editor on your list.

Something to think about.

-Jan R

How’s That Elevator Speech Coming?

July 30, 2019July 30, 2019 Writing your first novel-Some things you should knowElevator Speech, Pitch, Writing tipsLeave a comment

images-2 If you don’t have that elevator speech, you need to start thinking about it. Just because your plans don’t include a writer’s conference in the near future, doesn’t mean you don’t need one. I definitely don’t want you to fall into the same trap I did. Very embarrassing 🙂

I attended a work conference with my husband several years ago. It was a great getaway for me and a chance to focus on my novel without the distractions of home. Needless to say, I was enjoying myself and making some significant progress.

I was asked to join my husband and some of his peers for supper the evening before we were scheduled to leave. I was surrounded by men talking shop, so all I had to do was smile and display exemplary dining skills-or so I thought.

About halfway through the meal, one of the men looked over at me and said, “Your husband told us what you do during the day while he is at the conference. We would love to hear a little more about your book. What’s it about?”

Well, I froze. My mind went totally blank. It was all I could do to control my suddenly out of whack emotions, as I turned to face this man who had the audacity to ask me such a question.

I wasn’t prepared. I didn’t have an Elevator Speech. I didn’t think I needed one. My novel was complete, but it wasn’t ready for prime time.

I have that Elevator Speech now. I felt foolish and was totally caught off guard by men who were only trying to include me in the conversation. You never know when you’ll come across someone who’ll ask you what your book is about.

I’ll be prepared the next time. Plus, it will give me practice for when I do attend that writing conference or get the opportunity to speak to an agent/author I just happened to run into at the airport.

Some things to keep in mind :

Remember when you are crafting your speech, you are talking to another human being.
You only have 30-60 seconds. Don’t try to tell them the entire story.
Content is as important as delivery. It doesn’t matter if it’s well delivered if it’s boring and uninspiring. Make them want to hear more!
If you are attending a conference, you don’t want to accost agents/editors-wait for an invite or an appropriate opening. They know why you are there. Introduce yourself. Engage in small talk, they will usually ask.
Practice, practice, practice. You don’t want to memorize every word and sound like a robot or like you’re reading a teleprompter, but you do want your Elevator Speech to flow and be cohesive. You want it to sound natural.
Always be prepared and show passion.

If you haven’t prepared your speech, you need to start working on it. It’s just a matter of time. Somebody is going to ask.

-Jan R

Writing your first novel-Things you should know

Things you should know before writing your first Novel.

Show Don’t Tell

Word Echos!

It’s Just A Season!

Sentences – The Long And Short Of It -Revisited

You Don’t Know What You Don’t Know

Write For The Masses – Revisited

Commas, Commas, And More Commas!

Are You An Overwriter?

Maybe It’s Not You!

How’s That Elevator Speech Coming?

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