One of my favorite Posts deals with ‘ing’ words. They’re there. Sometimes they take over your story without you even realizing it, and other times they get lost in the background. Take a closer look at your prose. Especially in those areas that aren’t reading as smoothly as you would like. Maybe you will discover you are having a love affair with ‘ing’. These ‘ing’ words are all over the place.
Once I discovered my love affair with ‘ing’, I stopped the revision process and did some research on ‘ing’. I remembered reading somewhere, that the overuse of ‘ing’ words was not a good thing.
Opportunities to overuse the ‘ing’ word are boundless. There are nouns, adjectives, verbs, and even verbs masquerading as nouns called gerunds, all ending in ‘ing’.
So, what’s the big deal? What’s wrong with ‘ing’ words?
The overuse of ‘ing’ words mark you as an amateur – Don’t be alarmed if you see more than a handful on one page. Do take a closer look if you see more than a handful in a single paragraph.
Example of bad use of ‘ing’
While wrapping a soothing sling around the fledgling’s broken wing, Diana was humming, dreaming of her prince charming. Yet troubling thoughts about his depressing friend Starling kept intruding, interrupting her very entertaining daydreams. There was something intriguing and alarming about him.
‘ing’ verbs weaken your writing and make it clumsy and hard to read . Abigail was walking along the bike trail. There was a boy riding his bike. He was smiling up at her as she passed. She started wondering what the boy was so happy about.
Abigail walked along the bike trail. A boy smiled at her as he rode passed. She wondered what he was so happy about.
Starting a sentence with an ‘ing’ word is the weakest way to begin a sentence.
Hitting the thug in the face with her purse, Josie reached for her phone.
Josie hit the thug in the face with her purse and reached for her phone.
To identify overuse of ‘ing’ words in your writing, try this:
- Use the “search” or “find” function in your word processing app(usually under editing).
- Use ‘ing’ as your search term.
- Examine each ‘ing’ word you find.
- Ask whether the ‘ing’ word is essential to meaning.
- Determine whether a simple past or other tense might work better.
- Decide if a stronger word choice might be the way to go.
Once you identify ‘ing’ words, replace weak or common ones with specific, stronger word choices. Your writing will become more concise, clear, and engaging.
Remember, not all ‘ing’ words are bad. The issue is whether or not you have made the best word choice.
So much info on the internet. You get the cliff notes. Hope they help, or at least get you thinking 🙂
-Jan R
I opened up my novel in Word and began yet another revision at the start of the year. I tell myself this is it, and I certainly hope so, however, I have made some pretty significant changes. So I may have to go back and look at it one or two more times, to make sure I followed all of the rules 🙂
She confirmed what was missing, and why I was having a hard time connecting with a novel that I once loved. Instead of cleaning up the first few chapters by making them more clear and concise, instead of adding a minor conflict or looking at a way to make those chapters more interesting, I totally wiped them out, leaving the novel lacking.
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