I thought I would continue with the blog I wrote on Tuesday, Keep It Simple. You don’t want your reader to have to stop and think about what you are trying to say. You don’t want to slow them down or break up the pace.
You want your reader to continue through your novel without thinking about the fact they are reading a book. You want them to become part of your story, walking through the scenes with your cast of characters.
If they have to stop and reread a section for clarification, you’re in trouble. I recommend that you read your prose aloud before making it public. If you stop or hesitate on any sentence, go back, something isn’t right.
Additional things we do to over complicate our writing. And I did say we. I’m guilty too 🙂
He was not certain that he would not make a mess of it.
My head just exploded. What did that sentence just say. You’re going to have to slow down and reread that sentence a couple of times. A better way to write it-
He worried he might make a mess of it.
You did a lot of research to make your story sound authentic. That’s great, and the right thing to do, but your reader doesn’t want or need to know all of the information you collected. They aren’t interested in the intricacies of a process, give them an overview. Unless there is an important reason they need to know an intricate detail, keep it out.
Adding unnecessary descriptors in titles
He became the leader of the Commonwealth of Australia in 2012.
He became the leader of Australia in 2012.
She was a reporter in the United Stated of America during the Clinton administration.
She was a reporter in America during the Clinton administration.
If your reader already knows the setting is the USA-
She was a reporter during the Clinton administration.
It makes you look clumsy, like you haven’t thought things through. You’re unorganized. Why are you telling me something you told me in chapters 3,4 and 6? I know already! Give me a break! Don’t force me to relive a situation over and over again. I don’t like it.
With this being said, there are times when repetition is appropriate, but not usually in novels. Repetition can add clarity, emphasis, and eloquence- when used this way, I wouldn’t consider it careless.
A perfect example, would be the ‘I have a dream’ speech by Martin Luther King Jr. Check it out.
Hope this gave you something to think about and didn’t add to the confusion 🙂